The walk to school has now become like the green mile where every trip could be your last. I am constantly slipping and falling and it’s usually in front of a group of a really cute girls. There hasn’t been a day that’s gone by where I haven’t seen at least five people slip or fall. The ice on the ground is a serious problem and must be dealt with before someone gets seriously hurt. We as students have enough to pay for with tuition, books, and housing and we don’t need a hospital bill in top of all that. Fixing this very urgent problem will be costly, but the lives of the students are at stake. We must join together and fix this problem so that one of our own isn’t sent home in a casket.
-The not so Green Mile
-Ice, Ice, Baby
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I like your titles in this order: "Is BYU becoming a skating rink?", "Ice, Ice, Baby" and then, "The not so green mile" because you are talking about slipping on ice you should probably try to make it apparent in the title.
Your ethos and kairos are great. The only thing I would do is define how to fix the solution quickly. You said that it "must be dealt with before somebody gets hurt." Maybe you could give a solution that the school hire sidewalk ice clearers as soon as they can find willing students, or something like that.
ok, nice topic! I like "Ice, Ice, Baby" most. Then, "BYU becoming a skating rink" and then "The not so green mile".
Ethos and kairos are perfect. Especially right now during this snowy winter.
Now let me just give you some personal advise! When you see cute girls, don't put all of your attention and focus on them; instead concentrate on the ice and the sidewalks! I think that looking at girls is not worth a broken leg. Good Luck!
I like ice, ice baby best because everyone has heard the song and it makes you wonder what it is talking about.
For me, this one is easy to apply because i just fell a couple days ago and dislocated my shoulder and had to pay to go to the hospital and the whole 9 yards. It is wintertime now and everyone has to deal with it so also good job talking about how ALL of us have to deal with it.
I like the title becoming a Skate rink. I also think that you did a good job establishing your kairos and ethos. I think you have a valid argument because everyone I know has slipped on the ice. good Luck with the rest of your paper!
Haha, thats great, I totally agree!
The title I liked best was "Ice, Ice, Baby." YOu did a good job establishing ethos because you tell how you have almost fallen in front of girls. Good luck with your paper.
i really like your title "BYU becoming a skating rink?" It is very catchy and creative. You established ethos when you talked about the "really cute girls." I felt sorry for you right off the bat. Haha. I think you established kairos by making your blog entry very relevant to a BYU audience when you said that you are student that walks to school. Good job!
I liked the title, "BYU becoming a skating rink?" It told me what the article was going to be about, while at the same time making me want to continue reading because of the remote possibility of a real skating rink. I didn't like the other titles. On another note; when I read this it sounded like you were whining. Perhaps it's just me, but I'd prefer it to sound a bit less dramatic.
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