Imagine for a moment police officers in a shoot out while talking to their friends at the office. Sound ridiculous? Imagine a construction worker who, while at the control of an extremely powerful and dangerous machine is fixing his hair or eating a sandwich. Sound ridiculous…of course it does. As rational human beings we can see that when one is involved in the use of potentially dangerous materials it is best to focus one’s attention on the issue at hand and not other minute activities. However, when it comes to cars, people tend to think that this logic does not apply. A car is a very useful and important part of modern society, but it is still a potential weapon, no matter how much people choose to think that it is not. Reckless behavior on the part of drivers is not only dangerous for their own safety because everyone around them is potentially in danger. When it comes to pedestrians, no human being can withstand being struck by a car at high speeds. From personal experience I can say that even after taking all of the necessary precautions to insure my safety while crossing busy streets, reckless drivers have almost struck me with their car. Had I been hit on these occasions, I would have had serious injuries or even worse, because my 130 pound body is no match for an SUV that weighs thousands of pounds. I was fortunate, others have not been. Very recently at BYU a young student, Rebbeca Blazzard, was killed by an SUV. As you can see, this issue is not something that we hear about on the news once in a while or see in an occasional newspaper article, it is real. How high does the body count have to rise before drivers will start taking responsibility for themselves?
The Killers Next Door: Your Car & Reckless Behavior
Bloodshed on Provo Streets
4 comments:
I like the bloodshed on Provo’s streets title the best and you did establish ethos and kairos and it applies to BYU students. Good Job.
Very powerful title. Good job.
Because of your emotional appeal that excluded any humor and because of your vocabulary, it sounded respectable enough. I think you related to the reader extremely well, that reader being me. I wait until all lanes of traffic come to complete stops and I make sure I create eye contact with the drivers because I too have been nearly grazed by cars, although at slower than lethal speed but regardless. Crosswalk are war zones.
The title you already have totally captured my attention. So, I would keep it. You did a good job of establishing your ethos an kairos. You were able to portray the importance of this issue through your paragraph. Good job and good luck!
Your title is excellent. Very clever. I think that you established your ethos and kairos very well. This is something that needs to be addressed. Very well written.
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